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“The pie chart shows the distribution of the world's population by region in 2020.”Model answer
176 wordsP1The pie chart illustrates the distribution of the world population across six regions in 2020.
P2Overall, Asia accounted for well over half of the global population, making it by far the largest region, while Oceania represented the smallest share. The majority of the world's population was concentrated in just two regions.
P3Asia was the dominant region, home to 59% of the global population, a proportion that alone exceeded the combined total of all other regions. Africa was the second largest region at 17%, and together Asia and Africa made up 76% of the world's population. Europe accounted for a further 10%, bringing the cumulative share of the three largest regions to 86%.
P4The remaining three regions contributed considerably smaller proportions. Latin America represented 8% and North America 5%, giving a combined figure of 13% for the two Americas. Oceania accounted for just 1%, the smallest proportion of any region in the chart. These figures highlight the pronounced concentration of global population in Asia and, to a lesser extent, Africa, relative to other parts of the world.
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