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“The line graph shows the percentage of population living in urban areas in four countries from 1990 to 2020.”Model answer
207 wordsP1The line graph shows the percentage of the total population living in urban areas in the UK, China, Nigeria and India between 1990 and 2020.
P2Overall, all four countries became more urbanised over the period. The UK remained the most urbanised throughout, while India was consistently the least urban. China and Nigeria recorded the most substantial increases, with China overtaking Nigeria between 2010 and 2015 to finish second.
P3The UK began at 78.1% in 1990 and increased gradually to 82.9% in 2020, reflecting an already highly urbanised baseline. China, by contrast, started at just 26.2% in 1990 and climbed steeply to 49.2% in 2010, then continued upward to 63.5% in 2020, more than doubling its urban share over 30 years.
P4Nigeria followed a broadly similar steep trajectory, rising from 35.2% in 1990 to 59.8% in 2020. India grew more slowly, from 25.6% to 34.1%, a gain of 8.5 percentage points, greater than the UK's 4.8-point increase but below those of China and Nigeria. China overtook Nigeria between 2010 and 2015: their 2015 figures were 57.3% and 55.7%. By 2020 their shares were 63.5% and 59.8% respectively. China's gain of 37.3 percentage points was the most striking, compared with Nigeria's 24.6, India's 8.5 and the UK's modest 4.8.
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China's more-than-doubling is accurately noted and the 2010 intermediate point is used to show the growth curve.
Good structural contrast between the slower UK and India group and the faster China and Nigeria group.
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