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“The line graph shows the number of international tourist arrivals in four countries from 2000 to 2020.”Model answer
216 wordsP1The line graph illustrates international tourist arrivals, in millions, for France, Spain, the USA and Thailand between 2000 and 2020.
P2Overall, each country ended 2015 above its 2000 level, although some series fluctuated, before arrivals fell sharply in 2020. France maintained the highest number of arrivals throughout the period, while Thailand, despite starting far behind the others, recorded the most consistent proportional growth before the 2020 fall.
P3France received 77.2 million arrivals in 2000, dipping briefly before recovering to 84.5 million by 2015. Spain and the USA increased overall from 46.4 and 51.2 million to 68.5 and 77.5 million respectively by 2015. Spain was above the USA in 2005 but below it in 2000 and from 2010 onwards. Thailand started at just 9.6 million in 2000 and rose steadily to 29.9 million by 2015, more than tripling over that span.
P4The most dramatic feature of the graph is the sharp collapse in 2020 across all four countries. France fell from 84.5 million to 41.7 million, Spain from 68.5 to 18.9 million, and the USA from 77.5 to just 19.2 million. Thailand dropped from 29.9 to 6.7 million. Spain and the USA each lost more than 70% of their 2015 figures, compared with France's fall of roughly 50%. Thailand's decline was proportionally the largest, at approximately 78%.
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The comparative severity of the 2020 decline is quantified and differentiated across countries.
Good lexical range for the contrasting phases: 'dipping briefly', 'rose steadily', 'more than tripling', 'sharp collapse'.
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