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“The maps show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and today.”Model answer
199 wordsP1The two maps show the village of Stokeford as it appeared in 1930 and as it looks today.
P2Overall, residential development has increased considerably, with new housing north of the river and a much denser arrangement of houses to the south. The River Stoke has remained unchanged throughout.
P3In 1930, the land north of the river consisted of two large areas of farmland, and to the south seven houses in two groups stood near a single shop in the centre of the village. Today, the farmland on the eastern side of the north bank has been replaced by a large new housing estate, though farmland on the north-western side has been retained. South of the river, residential development has increased dramatically, with approximately 24 houses now arranged in a grid pattern, compared with the two smaller groups of 1930.
P4The single shop that existed in 1930 has been removed, and a public park has been added on the south side of the village. The River Stoke, which runs east-west across the middle of the map, has remained unchanged. These changes have increased residential development and introduced a green leisure space, while retaining the river as the village's central feature.
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The unchanged River Stoke is explicitly noted.
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The closing sentence repeats the housing and park changes already covered in the body.