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“The line graph shows the share of renewable energy in total final energy consumption in four countries from 19…”Model answer
200 wordsP1The line graph shows the renewable share of final energy consumption, as a percentage, in Germany, the USA, Brazil and China between 1990 and 2020.
P2Overall, Germany and the USA recorded consistent growth, while Brazil fluctuated around a high level throughout. China's share declined sharply in the early period before stabilising and recovering modestly by 2020. Brazil remained comfortably the highest of the four throughout.
P3Brazil began at 49.8% in 1990, fell to 42.7% in 2000, then partially recovered to 46.8% in 2010 before dipping again to 43.7% in 2015 and rebounding to 50% in 2020, essentially returning to its 1990 level. China, by contrast, started at 33.9% in 1990 but fell to 29.6% in 2000 and then more sharply to 12.3% in 2010, before stabilising at 12.2% in 2015 and edging up to 14.9% in 2020, remaining far below its starting figure.
P4Germany recorded the strongest growth of the remaining two, rising from 2.1% in 1990 to 18.5% in 2020, a final share almost nine times its starting level. The USA grew more modestly from 4.2% to 11%. A crossover occurred between Germany and China between 2010 and 2015, when Germany's rising share surpassed China's much lower stabilised level.
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Germany's final share is correctly compared with its starting level: 18.5% is approximately 8.8 times 2.1%.
Varied language for different trend shapes: 'fluctuated', 'fell', 'edging up', 'rebounding'.
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The description of the USA is somewhat brief; the available 2010 value of 7.4% would make its growth arc more concrete.