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“The line graph shows mobile cellular subscriptions per 100 people in four countries from 2000 to 2020.”Model answer
218 wordsP1The line graph shows mobile cellular subscriptions per 100 people in the USA, China, Nigeria and India between 2000 and 2020.
P2Overall, all four countries saw dramatic growth, though from very different starting points. China recorded the most remarkable increase, eventually overtaking the USA to finish highest, while Nigeria and India also rose sharply from near-zero bases.
P3In 2000 the USA led with 38.9 subscriptions per 100 people, followed at a distance by China at 6.7. Nigeria and India had very low subscription rates at that point, recording 0 and 0.3 respectively. The USA grew steadily, crossing 100 by 2015 and reaching 103.9 in 2020. China, however, expanded far more rapidly: from 30 per 100 in 2005 it climbed to 63.6 in 2010 and surged to 120.5 by 2020, surpassing the USA between the 2015 and 2020 observations, and ending as the highest of the four.
P4Nigeria and India followed broadly similar steep upward paths. Nigeria rose from the reported zero in 2000 to 52.4 in 2010 and 95.4 in 2020, while India reached 60.5 in 2010 and 82.3 in 2020, ending with the lowest rate. Nigeria was below India in 2000 and 2010 but above it in 2005, 2015 and 2020. The crossover between China and the USA is the most striking individual feature of the graph.
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Effective grouping in the third paragraph compares Nigeria and India to avoid repetition.
Varied trend language: 'dramatic growth', 'low subscription rates', 'surged', 'reported zero'.
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The given 2015 comparison, China at 92.5 versus the USA at 101.8, could support the stated crossover interval more explicitly.