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“The bar chart shows meat consumption per person per year in five countries in 2020.”Model answer
202 wordsP1The bar chart shows how much meat was consumed per person per year, in kilograms, in five countries in 2020.
P2Overall, the USA and Australia had the two highest figures and were closely matched, with Brazil next and China and India lower. India had by far the lowest figure, consuming only a negligible amount compared with the leading nations.
P3The USA recorded the highest per capita meat consumption at 124 kg, just ahead of Australia at 121 kg. These two countries were closely matched and well above the remaining three. Brazil came third at 99 kg, which, while lower than the USA–Australia pair, still represented a considerably higher figure than either China or India.
P4China's consumption stood at 60 kg per person, roughly half that of the USA, while India's figure was just 4 kg per year, the lowest of all five countries by a vast margin. The USA's per-person consumption was 31 times India's, while China's was 15 times as high. The chart reports these differences without explaining their causes. The chart therefore presents a clear hierarchical pattern, with the USA and Australia at the top, Brazil in the middle, and China and India well below the two leading countries shown.
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All five figures and their rank order are correctly reported.
Comparison language matches the text: 'well above', 'closely matched', 'considerably higher' and 'by a vast margin'.
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