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“The maps show an island before and after the construction of facilities for tourists.”Model answer
207 wordsP1The two maps illustrate an island before and after the construction of tourist facilities.
P2Overall, the island has been transformed from an undeveloped island with trees and a beach into a functioning tourist resort. It has become considerably more built-up, with a network of footpaths connecting newly constructed buildings, while the beach on the south-western shore and much of the natural vegetation have been retained.
P3Prior to development, the island contained no buildings or access infrastructure and was covered in trees and natural vegetation apart from the beach. A beach occupied the south-western shore. Following development, a reception building has been constructed in the centre of the island, serving as a hub for visitors. To the east, two clusters of accommodation huts have been added. A restaurant has been built near the beach on the south-western side, allowing guests to make use of the existing shoreline.
P4A pier has been added on the southern coast to provide boat access to the island, and a designated swimming area has been marked in the sea just off the south-western beach. Footpaths now link the reception to the accommodation, the restaurant, and the pier, facilitating movement across the island. The beach and much of the original vegetation have been retained.
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Compass directions used consistently to locate each new feature: centre, east, south-western shore, southern coast.
Identifies the retained beach and vegetation alongside the added facilities.
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The accommodation and access routes could be grouped more closely in the description.