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“The bar chart shows health expenditure per person in five countries in 2019.”Model answer
191 wordsP1The bar chart illustrates health expenditure per person in US dollars across five countries in 2019.
P2Overall, the USA spent by far the most on health per capita, while India spent the least. The gap between the highest and lowest spenders was enormous, spanning over ten thousand dollars per person.
P3The USA's health expenditure stood at 10,921 US dollars per person, more than twice the figure for Germany, which was the second-highest at 5,440 dollars. Japan followed at 4,360 dollars, placing it considerably above the remaining two countries. These three nations all exceeded 4,000 dollars per person, whereas Brazil and India spent a fraction of that amount.
P4Brazil's per capita health spending was 1,011 dollars, roughly a tenth of the US figure, while India's was just 211 dollars per person, the lowest of the five countries by a wide margin. The USA's per-person expenditure was approximately 52 times India's, while Brazil's was about 4.8 times as high. The three higher-spending countries contrast sharply with Brazil and India. The USA's rate was just over twice Germany's and about 2.5 times Japan's; these are comparisons of individual per-person rates, not combined national expenditure.
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