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“The maps show the centre of the town of Halton in 2000 and today.”Model answer
187 wordsP1The two maps show how the centre of Halton changed between 2000 and the present day.
P2Overall, the factory has given way to apartments, retail facilities have expanded, and the former houses have been replaced by a park. These changes have altered land use in each part of the centre, while Station Road has remained unchanged.
P3In the north-west, the factory that existed in 2000 has been replaced by a block of apartments. To the north-east, the open field has been converted into a supermarket with an adjacent car park. Along the southern edge of Station Road, the original row of shops has been redeveloped and replaced by a larger shopping centre, suggesting a consolidation of retail provision in that zone.
P4In contrast, the small cluster of houses that stood in the south-east in 2000 has been demolished and replaced by a public park, introducing a green recreational space into what was previously residential land. Station Road itself, which runs east-west through the centre of the area, has remained unchanged throughout the period and continues to serve as the main route dividing the northern and southern zones.
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Identifies Station Road as an unchanged feature alongside the redevelopment.
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