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“The line graph shows the female labour force participation rate in four countries from 1990 to 2020.”Model answer
200 wordsP1The graph shows female labour force participation rates, expressed as a percentage of working-age women, in the USA, Germany, Japan and Italy from 1990 to 2020.
P2Overall, Germany recorded the most consistent rise over the period and had nearly caught up with the USA by 2020, while Italy remained the lowest throughout. Japan, the only country to experience a temporary dip, recovered strongly in the final decade.
P3The USA led with 56% in 1990, rose to 58.7% in 2000 and then fell to 55.7% by 2020, ending close to its starting level. Germany, meanwhile, climbed steadily from 45.2% to 55.1%, almost drawing level with the USA by the end. Japan began at 50.1% but edged downwards to 48.3% by 2010 before rising to 53.1% in 2020, its highest figure of the period. The trajectory for Japan was therefore U-shaped, contrasting with the more linear gains seen elsewhere.
P4Italy consistently recorded the lowest participation rate, moving only marginally from 35% in 1990 to 39.5% in 2020. By 2020 Italy still lagged Germany by more than 15 percentage points. The gap with Germany widened from 10.2 points in 1990 to 15.6 in 2020, while the gaps with the USA and Japan narrowed.
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The final sentence of the overview could be slightly tighter; the point about Germany is restated in the body paragraph.