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“The line graph shows CO2 emissions per capita in four countries from 1990 to 2020.”Model answer
201 wordsP1The line graph illustrates CO2 emissions per person in four countries, measured in tonnes per person, between 1990 and 2020.
P2Overall, emissions fell in the USA, Germany and the UK across the period, whereas China's figure rose sharply and had overtaken the UK and Germany by 2020. The USA remained the highest emitter throughout, while China climbed from the lowest position to become the second highest by the end.
P3In 1990 the USA recorded by far the highest emissions at 20 tonnes per person, edging up to 21 tonnes by 2000 before declining steadily to 13.5 tonnes in 2020. Germany and the UK followed a similar downward path: Germany fell from 12.7 to 7.7 tonnes, while the UK dropped more steeply, from 10.2 to 4.8 tonnes, ending the period as the lowest of the four.
P4China, by contrast, began at just 2.1 tonnes per person in 1990 and climbed consistently, surging to 6.8 tonnes by 2010, then to 8.5 tonnes in 2020. China was still below the UK in 2010 but above it in 2015, placing that crossover between those observations. It overtook Germany between 2015 and 2020. Germany continued to decline in the final interval, from 9.6 to 7.7 tonnes.
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