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“The bar chart shows the adult literacy rate in five countries around 2020.”Model answer
195 wordsP1The bar chart illustrates the proportion of adults aged 15 and over who were literate in five countries around 2020.
P2Overall, literacy rates varied considerably across the five nations, with Russia and China recording near-universal literacy while Nigeria had by far the lowest rate. Russia, China and Brazil all exceeded 90%, whereas India and Nigeria were below 75%.
P3Russia recorded the highest literacy rate at 99.7%, followed closely by China at 97.2%. Brazil sat in the middle of the range at 93.2%, indicating that roughly one in fifteen adults lacked basic literacy skills. India and Nigeria had considerably lower figures, at 74.4% and 62% respectively, meaning that more than a quarter of Indian adults and over a third of Nigerian adults were unable to read or write.
P4The gap between the top and bottom of the chart was substantial: Nigeria's literacy rate was nearly 38 percentage points below that of Russia. Nigeria's figure was 12.4 percentage points lower than India's. Brazil was 18.8 points above India but 6.5 points below Russia and 4 points below China. These comparisons show the differences between the five countries in the chart without extending the findings to other countries.
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Strong comparison language: 'followed closely by', 'sat in the middle', 'considerably lower', 'respectively'.
Well-organised body paragraphs that move logically from top to bottom of the ranking.
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Could mention the precise gap between Brazil and India more explicitly to sharpen the mid-range comparison.